The Official Writing Challenge
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Very good descriptions! I can see the imagery here, like the "Vat of yesterday's intentions" WOW! Great stuff!
Wow...what wonderful word choices for this awesome poem.
01/11/08
This is excellent writing, and the lesson taught, nailed, at the end is perfect.
01/11/08
This is very good -- so real. And a nice take on the topic.
01/12/08
Powerful - excellent imagery, and extremely convicting.
01/12/08
very very good
Powerful imagery and poignant message. Your poetry is breathtaking.
Great imagery, WONDERFUL message.
01/14/08
This blessed me to read it. I'll go tell my family I love them right now....
01/14/08
What a wonderful poem.Very convicting.
01/14/08
Linda, this is awesome. Love the title, love the tone, love everything about this ouch-inducing poem.
Convicting, convincing, compelling and completely on target.
01/14/08
Wow, I loved the tone of the voice. Great message in a gripping piece.
01/14/08
Excellent use of words and one can feel the tangible warning.
01/15/08
Interesting!
Not exactly a poem...but kind of...
I knew what the last two words would be before I got there.
Well done.
Powerful message. Nice imagery. Very well done.
01/16/08
A depth of feeling and emotion in this poem. Beautifully crafted, too.
01/16/08
Wow! I am in awe! What a beautiful, lovely way to illustrate that verse.

Some favorite lines from this are, "Or do you think that hoarding such manna will feed your lonely tomorrows?

And will squirreling away the blessing feed your winter heart?"

I love it!
Your use of words is pure artistry.
I should read this every day of my life.
01/16/08
Very deep and a great message. I will read this one again and again. Nice job!
01/16/08
Just had to say, I read it a second time, and I'm even more touched and impressed.
01/17/08
most excellent work and one of my favorites for the week! Strong message delivered in a truly masterful way. You are very good!
01/17/08
'I'm sorry' I didn't read this earlier...
01/20/08
Beautiful. I love how this poem builds in intensity, then ends quietly, but never gives up its message. Well deserved EC.
I;ll say it, I'm sorry that I didn't see ths piece until today. Congrats on an outstanding example of the proverb.
08/22/08
Oh boy, every word is so powerful! Incredible writing.
(placed ninth)