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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Experiment (02/16/12)
I confess
I have done it once
Only
Standing in the checkout queue
Sugar level dropping through the floor
Queue moving snail speed
Yes, I confess
I ate the chocolate bar
And handed over an empty wrapper
To be scanned

Lent
Forty days of sacrifice
A wilderness journey
I want to do more than just
Go through the motions
Chocolate is off the menu
But I fret about
Withdrawal symptoms
After all
I am an addict

A memory surfaces
A documentary not so long ago
An experiment exposing
The truth about chocolate
A volunteer
An MRA scan
Exposed to pictures
Then fed melted chocolate
Through a tube
I wish it was me

Brightly coloured spots
Vivid red and orange
In some part of the brain
Registers
The delights of
Seeing and tasting
Brain scans show
There is no greater delight
In the tasting
Than in the seeing

Nothing in the ingredients
The cocoa beans
The sugar or milk
Lecithin or vanilla
Is addictive
A picture is sufficient
To stimulate the
The pleasure centres of the brain
Taste is irrelevant
Says science

The truth about chocolate says
Seeing is enough
Tasting is unnecessary
A picture is as powerful
As the personal encounter
The truth about God
Seeing is never enough
Tasting is essential
The personal encounter
Far outweighs any picture
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Member Comments
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Date
Amy Michelle Wiley 
02/24/12
Haha, I don't know about that. I like the dark chocolate on my tongue and I'm definitely addicted! Love the clever message and unusual format.
Ruth Thoutenhoofd
02/24/12
I find that study hard to believe! Tasting is believing. Great poetry!
C D Swanson 
02/24/12
Great poem with a wonderful message. I loved it. Thank you. God Bless~
Allen Povenmire
02/26/12
I thoroughly enjoyed every portion of this. I do hafta admit to a sudden craving...thanks! Nicely done.
Danielle King 
02/26/12
A very clever poem ending with a clear message. I don't see much chocolate because I eat it too fast to get tempted!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/29/12
I love the last stanza. I chuckled at the beginning because I'm not a big chocolate lover but could still understand your feelings and cravings.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
03/01/12
Glad to see this delightful poem with the wonderful message win an EC.
C D Swanson 
03/01/12
Congratulations on your placement. Beautiful job.

God Bless~
Nancy Bucca
03/01/12
What a delicious take on the topic. Melts in your mouth. Your flair for poetry has earned you yet another win.
Loren T. Lowery
03/01/12
Nicely done! The set up and pacing of your logic within the poem simply perfect. Congratulations on your EC placement!