The Official Writing Challenge
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02/11/10
You've described many businessmen and women, I do believe. I love your ending,

"Stop.
Breathe.
Sleep, beloved.

It is NOT about you."
02/16/10
I love the ending of this story. Beautifully done.
This is so good, so life-preserving, without being "preachy." Thank you for sharing this, and doing so well with it.
02/18/10
A well paced and timely commentary on lfe today. I esteem your creativity
Wow, placing 3rd in Masters is quite an acomplishment! Congrats on that and your Editors Choice placing!
02/19/10
Oh, oh, oh! This was fantastic! Very bold use of the rarely touched second person POV. I loved the line about forcing a smile like pulling up your socks...great imagery. Congratulations on your EC; it was well deserved!