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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Orange (the color) (11/19/09)
It’s orange where the Divine compels
This blistering desire to create
Sometimes I go where inspiration dwells

No need to wonder at my mental state
It was a gift bestowed by First Inventor
This blistering desire to create

I’ve wrestled orange and sculpted pleasure
Resplendent and beaming in newly forged grooves
It was a gift bestowed by First Inventor

The process of human perfection moves
Clay and imagination upward and outward
Resplendent and beaming in newly forged grooves

Have you in orange ever meandered, explored?
Let loose; the thoroughfares run straight
Clay and imagination upward and outward

In fallen state, I tend to adulterate
The ego clouds; but in orange He propels
Let loose; the thoroughfares run straight

Inertia, languor—vibrancy repels
Joy is freely given, while pride man sells
The ego clouds, but in orange He propels
Sometimes I go where inspiration dwells
Sometimes I go where inspiration dwells
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Date
Joanne Sher 
11/28/09
Fascinating images and a powerful piece.
Chely Roach
11/29/09
What a gorgeous picture of how He can use His children, even in our fallen state. Your lovely word choices (love the word resplendent) create a warm, relaxing tone. Fabulous.
Beth LaBuff 
11/29/09
Beautiful thoughts, word choices, especially "First Inventor," "blistering desire" and "newly forged grooves." Great contrast with the present reality in your last stanza.

Is this a terzanelle (modified villanelle)? I know they are extremely difficult to write and you've created one full of images with a haunting longing. You've made me desire to go this orange place "where inspiration dwells." I could willingly lose myself in your words.
Mariane Holbrook
11/29/09
I could spend half a day with your entry and still not get all the richness from it! I'll be anxious to see how this is judged. It should be high!
Catrina Bradley
11/30/09
I literally had to tear myself away to leave a comment. I don't know what the poetry form is (I'm sure Jan will tell us) but it's stunning and beautiful.
Henry Clemmons
12/01/09
Very good. I loved the sounds and tempo. Refreshing; extremely refreshing.
Colin Swann
12/01/09
This piece is pregnant with meaningful imagery. Thank you.

Colin
larry troxell
12/01/09
loved the line ".. gift bestowed by First Inventor." great imagery.
Bryan Ridenour
12/01/09
Awesome format. Loved the poetry and the message. Well done!
Loren T. Lowery
12/01/09
How sad that such bliss be so transitory – it is, after all, surely our natural state for which we are made. How sad that it is our own well-intentioned efforts that cause us to fall from perfection. If we could only just learn to just be.

This poem reminds me of something William Wordsworth wrote:
'Tis my faith that every flower
Enjoys the air it breathes!”

The flower’s beauty, its intoxicating fragrance is in a constant state of grace, because of the simple joy of being what it was made to be.

So to we strive to learn from the casual beautiful evidence that so effortlessly plays before us. Maybe we should be less like the Red Queen in Alice's Wonderland, always running in place - going nowhere. Maybe we should stand still and simply be.
Marita Thelander 
12/01/09
I read through this several times and saw something different in it every time. I once, in my imagination, saw Anne of Green Gables quote this with all the flare and drama we all love about her. Impressive.
Jim McWhinnie 
12/02/09
"the place where inspiration dwells" - now that is simply poetic genius ...

to quote a gifted poet "Resplendent!"
Verna Cole Mitchell 
12/02/09
Creativity unbridled! I long to dwell in this "orange." I love this poem for the masterful choice of words, as well as the wonderful message.
Mona Purvis
12/02/09
'blistering desire to create' is what speaks to me in this entry. I conjure up VanGogh-type characters.
Makes me want to be smarter in order to savor this even more.

Mona
Jan Ackerson
12/02/09
If I could write poetry this exquisite, I'd never write another word of prose. Perfect.
Diana Smith 
12/02/09
Beautiful words and images.
Bryan Coomes
12/02/09
Beautiful.
Catrina Bradley
12/02/09
Ah HA! YOU wrote this! Wow, sister. I just read it again and wanted to weep at the end.
Eileen Knowles
12/03/09
Wow. I have just recently started to appreciate poetry. Still can't seem to write it, but I am in awe of people who can. This was beautiful and very thought provoking.
Joshua Janoski
12/03/09
In my opinion, what separates the good writer from the great writer is whether or not you can go beyond just the typical short story and write something with depth and beauty. It looks like you have stepped over the good line and into the great with this piece.
Carol Slider 
12/03/09
Absolutely gorgeous, Lisa! Congratulations!!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
12/03/09
Congratulations on placing with this awesome poem. I've played it over and over in my mind like a much- loved melody.
Aaron Morrow
12/03/09
Congratulations Lisa, beautiful work!
Beth LaBuff 
12/03/09
So glad to see this on the EC list! Congrats, Lisa!!!
Karlene Jacobsen 
12/03/09
Congrats Lisa on your EC! Excellent writing as always. :)
Henry Clemmons
12/03/09
Congratulations! An extemely well written piece. I am very proud to see it recognized.
Sheri Gordon
12/03/09
Wow and Wow. Congratulations on your EC, my Hui. :)
Noel Mitaxa 
12/04/09
This week, as usual, you have definitely come from where inspiration dwells. A beautiful entry. Congratulations Lisa, and - if I can be so bold as to advise Jan A. Please, before you make any decisions about your writing future; you'd better weigh up the prose and cons.