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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)
Who shares my features’ shape and size,
The color of my eyes?

Who has the same held memory
Of years that used to be?

Who recollects with me the ways
We spent our holidays?

Who knows the dumb things that I did
When I was just a kid?

Whom did I fuss with and call names
When we played childhood games?

Who knows the love our parents had
When we were good or bad?

Who still remembers how Mom cooked
And how her kitchen looked?

Who sat with me when Daddy died
And held my hand and cried?

Who joins with me to celebrate
For each important date?

Who sends a loving birthday rhyme
On that day every time?

Who calls me on the phone to chat
With news of this and that?

Who shares a laugh for bygone years,
All mingled with our tears?

Who feels the thread that binds my heart
When we are far apart?

You guessed, I’m sure, who it could be—
My siblings, dear to me.
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Member Comments
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Date
Joanne Sher 
05/08/08
Very sweet, and lovely memories. Nice job with the rhyme and meter.
Phyllis Inniss 
05/09/08
Your poem says so much and there's a lovely feel to it.
Emily Gibson
05/10/08
So many universal experiences in this delightful reflection on siblings-fun and well done!
Jan Ackerson
05/12/08
I like your meter--sometimes rhymed couplets get a bit wearisome, but you broke up the rhythm a bit by making the 2nd line shorter than the first. Excellent.
Laury Hubrich 
05/12/08
Excellent, Verna! Great job;) You make me want to go right out and call my brother and sisters!
Laury
Dee Yoder
05/12/08
This poem made me nostalgic for my siblings-when we were all together under one roof and the only things we worried about were our childhood games and grievances! Love the many common examples that being a sibling entails.
Sharlyn Guthrie
05/12/08
This would be lovely on a greeting card! I like the unusual rhythm you used. It worked well for the wording you chose.
Betty Castleberry
05/14/08
Sweet recollections in this poem. It is very nostalgic and has a nice feel to it. Kudos.
Mariane Holbrook
05/14/08
She's so lucky to have a sister like you! What a loving poem, and one you can cross-stitch for her for her birthday! Great job, Verna!
Beckie Stewart
05/14/08
This was well done. Enjoyed it from start to finish.
Beth LaBuff 
05/14/08
You captured everything is this poem. I especially like the reminiscing with "Who still remembers how Mom cooked -- And how her kitchen looked?" Your meter and rhyme are excellent. Very nicely written.
Debbie Wistrom
05/14/08
Your few words said so much.
I love this little poem.
Sara Harricharan
05/14/08
Awww! This is such a great tribute to sisters/brothers! I really liked how you put things like the memory of Mom cooking in the kitchen, etc. So nice! ^_^
LauraLee Shaw
05/14/08
You know, this made me zoom out to all the incredible questions I would ask about my sister. She has been such a faithful friend and has loved me so incredibly. I don't sit and ponder it often enough. Love this.
Marita Vandertogt
05/14/08
You cover a lot of life in such a short space.. nicely done!
Joy Faire Stewart
05/14/08
I was very touched by your writing. I lost my brother several years ago and this poem reminded me so much of our relationship.
Loren T. Lowery
05/14/08
Endearing and written so well, that I'm a bit envious of the wonderful relationship you all shared!
Angela M. Baker-Bridge
05/15/08
I agree with everyone else, especially that this would make an excellent greeting card... I would buy it for my sister!
Yvonne Blake 
05/15/08
Yes, there's something special about being able to share memories with someone.
Very well done!
LaNaye Perkins
05/15/08
Yes, I also agree that this would make a perfect card to give a sibling. Well done my friend.