The Official Writing Challenge
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05/25/16
Nice devotional thoughts. There were a few awkward spots. More elder? Maybe it should just be older.
05/25/16
My personal opinion is that this would have a better hook at the beginning if you started it with your fourth chapter.("Recently, being the young age of 83...) This begins at a more personal level which, I believe, is much more effective at keeping the readers attention. Personal experiences are interesting and make for great illustrations.
Good Devotional
05/26/16
It is very interesting that older citizens generally are more faith oriented and likely to attend church than the younger generation.
05/26/16
great job!

Blessings~