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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Flat (01/03/13)
I am a tiger's paw. No, seriously! That's what they call me. I am number four of four paws on this rattle trap my Lady calls a car. I am much too fine of a tire to be rolling this old wreck around, but I must admit there must be a tiger in its tank by the way she keeps burning my rubber.

My Lady doesn't know anything about cars, and she couldn't care less about tiger paws until one lets her down. I have never let my Lady down before, but yesterday I got a thorn stuck in me, and she doesn't know it, but I am dying.

I live on the left side of this rat hole in the rear. I just spent the night sitting in her garage with a bright and shiny silver thorn in me. She could have at least parked with my thorny side up, but no, she had to stop at the precise moment the insidious thing was against the concrete floor. All I can do is sit here in misery, while my life seeps away.

I am in agony and no ones cares...

It is finally morning, and my Lady comes out to go to work. She gets into the car without even noticing how low I am feeling. The other three paws on this worn out old car are laughing at me. I don't know why, it could have very well been one of them who got the thorn. I hiss at them.

Well, I can't let my Lady down. Have to get her to work, so here we go. She's backing out of the garage now.

“Ow! Ow! Ow!” What's the matter with her? Can't she hear me? Of course not, she's got that pitiful old crackling radio on full blast playing all that rock and roll nonsense. I much prefer classical music. Oh well, we're moving. Gotta roll.

Words cannot describe how tortuous this is. Thank goodness she doesn't live very far from where she works, because I can't hold out much longer. I am holding my breath and praying to make it just two more blocks.

Oh! Thank heavens! She's approaching the drive way to the parking lot at work. I exhale. Now I can finally rest in peace in knowing I got her here safely.

Goodbye cruel world. Flap, flop, flap, flop, flap, flop, whoooosh!

…..............................................................................................

Hello! Tiger paw number four here. My Lady finally noticed something was wrong with me and had me resuscitated and my thorn removed. I'm baaack!

Roll on rattletrap. Roll on, my Lady.



*This is a true story told from my tire's POV. In 1990 I was newly divorced and didn't make much money. I bought an old Oldsmobile for $850.00. It had seen better days, but it had a good engine and a set of Tiger Paws on it.
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Terry Lee
01/10/13
This entry was fun to read. I enjoyed reading from the perspective of the tiger paw, and loved your clever little phrases like,

"I hissed at them," and
"Gotta roll."

Regarding the phrase, "Words cannot describe..." I have used this phrase on occasion, and when I have, I've always wondered, 'Can words describe this feeling?" Because if they could--if I could find the right words, they could add another dimension to my piece.
Joe Moreland
01/12/13
I knew someone would take the challenge of using a flat tire to meet this topic, but I never dreamed it would be such a wonderfully creative piece as this. I, of course, thought of flat tire right away and immediately dismissed it as too obvious. You, on the other hand took the obvious and turned it upside down and made it fresh and funny. Great job!
Sarah Elisabeth
01/12/13
Haha, this was fun! Lots of great lines here, and you made it roll smooth from start to finish.

Next time, you might not put the entire piece in italics, it made it harder to read.

Great job building empathy for the tiger paw. I was rooting for him all the way!
Danielle King 
01/12/13
Oh this is sooo creative, amusing and defo out of the box. Flat tyre and flat chest were my first thoughts for the topic but I thought nah, too obvious. And look what you've done with it clever lady. I also think Tiger Paws speak better in italics. Grrrreat job!
Noel Mitaxa 
01/12/13
Let me paws to gather my thoughts....
Very creative and funny, though your MC did get into quite a flap.
Great wordplay and word pictures. Well done.
C D Swanson 
01/12/13
Clever, entertaining and a delight to read. I thought this was a fabulous entry and a great way to present the topic. God bless~
Virgil Youngblood 
01/13/13
You hit the bulls eye with this. It's a winner me thinks.
Ellen Carr 
01/13/13
A great read and well written, from the tire's POV. I didn't know what 'Tiger Paws' were but I guess it is a brand name (?).
Ennis Smith 
01/13/13
Interesting story, from the perspective of the tire. The "true-story" aspect makes it all the better.
Bea Edwards 
01/14/13
Really creative and entertaining. Your line about the Tiger Paw hissing at his com padres was priceless. Well done!
Bea Edwards 
01/14/13
Really creative and entertaining. Your line about the Tiger Paw hissing at his com padres was priceless. Well done!
Lillian Rhoades 
01/14/13
Well, well, well, Lynn!
Loved every creative line: My favorite: "until one lets her down.." Oh, the subtle, double meaning there.

Great piece o' writing
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/18/13
I love this story. It was an absolute delight. There have been many flat tire stories this week but yours is the first told from the POV of the tire. Congratulations on ranking 7 in level three and 24 overall!