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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Our Mutual Friend (not about the book) (09/15/11)
Mel opened the door and let herself in to Dee's small, one-bedroom apartment. "Helloooo!" She'd barely crossed the threshold when she smelled it, that musty aroma that she knew so well. "Oh no, she's back." Mel steeled her resolve and entered the kitchen where her nemesis awaited her presence.

Well, well, if it isn't little miss goody two shoes! Why, you don't look at all happy to see me; what's the matter Mel, feeling a little threatened are we?"

"What are you doing here? I thought I made myself perfectly clear last time to leave my friend alone."

Yes, well you know how it goes - bad day turns into a bad week and it's, 'oh, let's call the long lost party friend...'

"You're no friend to Dee!"

Really? Are you sure that's the way she sees it? I mean, let's look at the facts here Mel; in a crisis, who is it that Dee has turned to? Hmm?

"A true friend doesn't encourage them to self destruct!"

I am doing no such thing, Mel. Dee has had the worst possible week; she got passed over for a promotion at work, Dave is .. well, being his usual charming self; and she's staring down the proverbial gun-barrell as far as keeping this hovel of an apartment...she missed the past two weeks' rent, you know. Mel, you're looking at me as if this is all news to you. For someone who claims to be her 'best friend' I must say I'm a little surprised you weren't aware of these things. Or maybe she feels she just can't turn to you and, having no where else to go, she felt she could call on me to help her get through the next few days. And let's face it, I'm a much better listener than you'll ever be. Besides, we're just going to have a bit of fun, where's the harm?

"The harm is that you make her forget her true self. You feed her lie after lie and blind her to the facts. For a while at least."

And how is that a bad thing? She's going through hell at the moment; I'm helping her to cope until she's back on the right track and the train pulls out of that station. Then I'll be on my way and you can get back to your girly stuff, like sleepovers and gossip magazines.

"But we both know that's not going to happen, don't we?! You'll keep on planting subtle seeds of self-doubt and confusion in her mind, until she is unable to let go of you, and you'll be her flatmate for ever. And I'm sorry, but I refuse to let that happen."

Hehehe, oh Mel, you're so deluded. Dee has made her choice; I won! And there's nothing you can do about it!

"Oh, really!?"

And with that, Mel stood up, grabbed Merlot by the throat and poured her contents down the drain.
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Noel Mitaxa 
09/24/11
Great sense of intrigue builds through your dialogue, and a terrific twist to wrap it up. Loved it!
Nancy Bucca
09/24/11
Another great take on topic. Thoroughly enjoyable.
Linda Goergen
09/24/11
I thought Mel was going to fight the evil spirit Merlot at the end with prayer, instead of throwing her down the drain. But regardless this was certainly a well written and creative take on the challenge! Well done!
Lillian Rhoades 
09/26/11
Your personification of an inanimate object was creative.
Alcoholism is quite "beastie.":-)You acted as a best friend to Dee whom I would like to have heard from; to know if your actions made a difference. One tiny observation:
"A true friend does not encourage them to self destruct."..."A true friend does not encourage one to self-destruct." I like how you used the neck of the bottle to grab it by the "throat."
Gerald Shuler
09/26/11
Great use of personification. You handled a serious subject with tact and grace. Well done. (I also like the use of the bottle neck as the throat.)
Terry Lee
09/26/11
Very powerful, and creative.
Virgil Youngblood 
09/26/11
I liked the title and the well written story kept my attention. Well done.
Karen Pourbabaee 
09/30/11
Congratulations on your 3rd place and EC win for this gripping story!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/10/11
I like a surprise ending! I'm usually a little slow on these clever twists but I understood yours within 10 seconds! Thiswas really creative and spike volumes.