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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: See (07/22/10)
I don't fit in here. I don't like their talk so I can't participate. They wonder why I ostracize myself. If I hang with them, I'll sin. If I don't, they hate me. I'll just sit here alone and read my Bible. People are laughing as usual. They call me Bible girl. I'm taking a stand for Christ, though. I choose to radically serve Him so this is how it must be. I feel like reading Mark today. Let's see. (Mark 2:16-17 NLT) “But when the teachers of religious law, who were Pharisees, saw him eating with tax collectors and other sinners, they asked His disciples, 'Why does He eat with such scum?' When Jesus heard this, He told them, “Healthy people don’t need a doctor—sick people do. I have come to call not those who think they are righteous, but those who know they are sinners.”

Ouch Lord, why do you always lead me to Scriptures like these? What am I to do? They don't want to eat with me and I, don't want to compromise. Look around? All I see is people Lord. Some are smirking and mocking me. Some are rolling their eyes when I look their direction. What am I supposed to see? I hear people talking gossip and cursing and making fun of others, all things I don't want to participate in. What do you see Lord? What am I supposed to see?

Love! How in the world do you see love in these people? I know your blood was shed for their sins. I know you died to save them. I know you want to reach them. Yes, now I see. Oh God, these people are so precious in your sight. Help me not to weep. Not here. Not in front of them. They'll think I'm crying because I'm sitting alone and they're teasing me. Oh God, I can feel your love and compassion for these people. God please, don't let these tears come to my eyes. This is embarrassing. I'm about to cry. Oh God, your love is overwhelming me. Oh God, I can't help but weep. Now I'll never be able to reach these people. They probably think I'm a major nerd. Pray! You want me to pray. I'm feeling so much right now. I feel your love and compassion for these people. I feel totally humiliated that I'm crying. I feel frustrated that I don't know how to reach them with your love. And now, you want me to pray.

Okay, I'll get on my knees and pray, but I'm sure, a teacher will come and probably take me to the school psychologist and advise my parents to get me some psychological counseling.

“Lord, help me pray. Father God, you love these people so much. They are so special to you. God you know the hurts and pains they have. Inside they are like sick people who need a doctor. Doctor Jesus, you came to save them. I ask you for each one of their salvations. Touch them in a special way. Heal them inside and out, wherever they need your healing. Fill them with understanding of your love for them. Open their eyes to see who you are. Lord, you did it for me, and I'm nobody. So I know you can do it for them. God let them know how special they are to you. I pray this in Jesus name. Amen.”

Lord, I'm afraid to open my eyes. I know everyone must think I'm crazy. Grant me the boldness to get up off my knees, open my eyes and face these people.

Wow, everyone is looking. I was hoping some wouldn't notice. I suddenly feel like laughing.

“I'm sorry everyone. I suddenly saw how much God loves you and was overwhelmed. I know you all probably think I'm a nut case, but I'm not. I'm just a Christian who feels God's love for you.”

Wow, their reaction's not as bad as I thought it would be. Some are laughing and some are mocking, but some see. They actually see. I can see it in their eyes. Oh Lord, I see love. Help me guide them to you.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
07/29/10
The cries of the MC seem so real. I can feel the pain. I can't imagine having the courage to kneel in a crowded lunchroom to pray, but it's amazing what happens when we listen to God.
Rachel Phelps
08/04/10
I like the concept of this story a lot. I had a little trouble connecting to the MC because I wasn't sure of the age or gender of the person. The everyman aspect was nice, but I just had some trouble getting there.

Great story for this topic.
Rachel Phelps
08/04/10
Oops! I did not mean to say gender, because I did have that. Sorry for the mixup!
Edmond Ng
08/05/10
A very candid approach to showing how as believers we should feel for the lost souls. These words come through in speaking how we ought to feel, "God you know the hurts and pains they have ... Touch them in a special way. Heal them inside and out ... Open their eyes." God bless you.
Lollie Hofer 
08/05/10
Your mc had a good, consistent first person voice. That's tough to do. She also had a courage I don't think I have. I could hear her inner struggles as well. The only suggestion I would make would be to break up a couple of your paragraphs into smaller ones, they were a little long. Overall, a good story.
Lollie Hofer 
08/05/10
Your mc had a good, consistent first person voice. That's tough to do. She also had a courage I don't think I have. I could hear her inner struggles as well. The only suggestion I would make would be to break up a couple of your paragraphs into smaller ones, they were a little long. Overall, a good story.