The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this story very much! What an interesting unique couple Gil & Alice are. I can picture Alice in her monkey pajama pants looking for loose change & Gil bending a store clerk's ear. You've done an excellent job with this characterization study!
07/09/09
I liked every bit of this, and I couldn't stop reading even though I knew how it would end. Your descriptions are wonderful! I want to eat in that McDonald's, to live in a place where a little bit of love still changes lives. Well done!
I greatly enjoyed the reading of this story. It brings into light the fact that we touch people's lives each day. May we too do it with grace and love. So very well written. :)
07/10/09
A most beautiful rendition of an experience that plays out over and over again before our eyes, that is, if we are taking the time to look.
07/12/09
Just about perfect! You wove such an interesting tale of two ordinary oldsters living a simple life and touching others. When I leave this planet and join Jesus, I wonder how many will feel the loss. I'm going to consider this awhile.
Mona