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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Empty and Full (06/04/09)
Upon the door-posts, see the stain,
All firstborn saved, a lamb was slain.
The sacrifice was not in vain.


Then sinless Lamb of God in pain
Because of love and from His vein
Our sins are washed with Holy Rain.


Where once a pardon from the priest
Through calf, or bull, or dove at least
Bought precious mercy. Blood of beast.


Come kings of wisdom from the East
And proclaim Him; the old has ceased.
Ring in Grace, proclaim the feast.


There in the stable, lowly born
The King of Kings the world would scorn
Long past the day His own would mourn.


He is the One. John came to warn
One day would cause the veil be torn
And crown of thorns be pliant worn.


Blood that flows from nail-scarred hands
To offer life across all lands.
From God to us the bridge He spans.


When sins are numbered like the sands
And man no longer rightly stands,
He gave us Grace, was in His plans.


Drink from the cup, come join the fold.
Remember Him, His life Behold!
The gift He gives, more dear than gold.


An empty cup... no story told;
But His was full, no more could hold.
Salvation's plan, from days of old.


The cup He gives, no Holy Grail.
Not gold, nor jeweled...but a nail.
His death upon a cross to hail.


Eternal life for weak and frail.
Do not weep; do not wail.
Once and for all, rent is the veil.
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Beth LaBuff 
06/13/09
I very impressed with your work on this unusual three-line rhymed poem. Your meter is very good and your rhymes perfect in this. (and this rhyme scheme is difficult to do.) I like your alliterative title. As to your message -- this is powerful writing!
Betty Castleberry
06/15/09
You've managed to tell the story of Christ from birth forward in a limited number of words. Not only that, you did it in rhyme.

I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
06/15/09
Great work with poetry, as well as the message
Chely Roach
06/15/09
This was fantastic...loved it!
Rachel Rudd
06/15/09
Very well-written poem...amazing what you said with only three lines per stanza!
Bryan Ridenour
06/15/09
Super poem in a format I'm not real accustomed to reading. Super writing with a wonderful lesson taught. Great job!
Lollie Hofer 
06/15/09
What a wonderful poem! You did a remarkable job here - the words rhymed without even having to "force" words to fit and the cadence was consistent. This was a fun poem to read with a great message. Well done!
Connie Dixon
06/16/09
Great writing, I love the flow and the meter. What an awesome tribute to our Lord. I think He would be pleased!
Patricia Herchenroether
06/16/09
I love the message and I'm really impressed with this format. I get so locked into my four-liners-you have made me want to branch out; I thank you. Great writing.
Nancy Gustafson
06/17/09
It's difficult to write rhyming poetry, especially with perfect rhyme, rather than slant rhyme, without it sounding forced. Good job.
Carol Slider 
06/17/09
Gorgeous, meaningful, profound... This is beautiful! I thought the three-line format worked very well, too. Well done!!
Mariane Holbrook
06/17/09
I'm so impressed! Everything about this poem is outstanding. I hope you place and place high!
Karlene Jacobsen 
06/17/09
This is really well written. I didn't feel like I was stumbling through the lines or that the rhyme was forced for the sake of rhyme. Primo job! Kudos to you!
Sara Harricharan
06/17/09
Good job! Nicely done, it flows really easily and reads just as wonderfully! Great stuff! ^_^
Deborah Porter 
06/20/09
Hi Mona. I just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, Cup in the Calloused Hands of the Carpenter, actually did very well in the Empty and Full Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 3, placing 13th in that Level.

There were a lot of entries this week, and the competition is always intense in Level 3, so you deserve a pat on the back. :-)

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=25956

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

Hope to see you at the FaithWriters' Conference in August. It’s going to be an amazing time of inspiration, information and encouragement. (If I’ve already mentioned that to you, forgive me. We’re just so excited about letting members know about this great gathering.)
http://www.faithwriters.com/conference.php

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)