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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: South America (02/05/09)
Dear mother, how tight was your heart squeezed
Before your daughter lost her home?
Was it for life you gave your girl
And sent her to the streets to roam?

  You paid the bribe for your own gain,
  But now the void calls out her name—
  The loneliness has left a stain
  That marked your home a place of shame…

You men of justice, was it right
To beat the girl whose greatest crime
Was living on the streets, unloved,
Without a home to spend her time…

  You bit her flesh for your own gain,
  But now her blood cries out her name—
  Injustice left a crimson stain
  That marked your city with more shame…

You selfish man, whose lust was it
That stripped the girl of purity?
When she had none left to defend her
You ripped her soul and scorned her pleas…

  You ransacked her for your own gain,
  But now your guilt cries out her name—
  Your lust has left a ceaseless stain
  That marked this sinful world with shame…

You parents who rest safe at home,
Her soul is dying – do you care?
Her heart is wilting in the pain,
In need of loving, and your prayers…

  Will you ignore her in her pain?
  Her wandering soul cries out your name,
  In search for love to wash the stain
  And cover up the wounds of shame…


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Karlene Jacobsen 
02/16/09
Wow, how sad! I know this happens. It's just so sad. Good writing.
Laury Hubrich 
02/16/09
This is very sad. I hope someone feels compelled to reach out to these young girls. Good job.
Sharon Kane
02/18/09
A poignant and haunting poem, reminding us of the dark side of life It was fitting to add the footnote to give readers a chance to respond. I felt that as a poem it would have been even better if the rhyming pattern established in the first 2 verses had been held to in the last two. Your variation on the theme in the refrain was very clever though.
Jan Ackerson
02/18/09
Excellent, as usual!

I like the way you address several different "audiences", but in reality, you address us all. Effective repetition and assonance. Very well done!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
02/18/09
Sadness permeates your poem, and the plea in the last stanza is a most effective closure.
Joanne Sher 
02/18/09
Poignant, sad, and masterfully crafted. Tugged at my heart.
Shirley McClay
02/18/09
Oh my goodness. So sad but we need the reminder! Thank you!
Connie Dixon
02/18/09
Beautfiul writing about the terrbile subject of human atrocities that plague many societies. Thanks for the reminder that there are some who don't have it so good and really need help.
Angela M. Baker-Bridge
02/19/09
Difficult subject well addressed.