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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Easter (05/30/05)
Because it was the Jewish day of Preparation and since the tomb was nearby, they laid Jesus there.

The End


Wasn't that a nice story?

He was such a good man that He let those mean people hit Him, and whip Him, and even crucify Him, all to take our place! You see, we deserve to suffer and die for our sins, but He did, instead, so all we have to do is accept His sacrifice for us, and we are saved! We get to live with God in heaven after we die! Forever!

Hooray!

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A little toothless, isn't it?

Where is the triumph over death, the greatest victory of all?

Jesus' rising again proves that He was and is the Son of God, as He said He was, and makes Him worthy of our trust.

The Resurrection has to be the point of our witnessing, not the crucifixion!

After His resurrection, He appeared to several of His followers in different locations, and the final time, He said, "But you will receive power when the Holy Spirit comes on you; and you will be my witnesses in Jerusalem, and in all Judea and Samaria, and to the ends of the earth." After he said this, he was taken up before their very eyes, and a cloud hid him from their sight. (Acts 1:8-9)

So many of us, Christians in the modern era, would sigh happily at this point and close the storybook:

The End


But, folks, even ending the story here leaves the hearer only gumming the message to death, with too little information!

Share His story, yes, but be sure and share it all--the death, the resurrection, and the impact the living Christ continues to have on the world, and your own life, today!

Since eternity looms for each and every soul, the time is now to get our message across: He was born, He lived, He died, He rose, He lives, He's coming back. Be ready!

Of the increase of his government and peace there will be no end.
He will reign on David's throne and over his kingdom,
establishing and upholding it with justice and righteousness
from that time on and forever. (Isaiah 9:7)


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Member Comments
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Kyle Chezum
06/07/05
I loved it! Very well crafted. Good job!
Sally Hanan
06/08/05
And they all lived hapily ever after and enjoyed their private relationship with Jesus, and no one else ever knew or heard... it's such a personal thing...
Thanks for this, it was pointedly good.
dub W
06/09/05
Interesting way to craft the story. Thank you for your submission.
Amy Michelle Wiley 
06/09/05
Good point!
Debbie OConnor
06/09/05
Excellent message! I love it. He reigns now and forever through His people on earth!
Shari Armstrong 
06/09/05
Very nice, I like that the story doesn't end :)
darlene hight
06/10/05
The opening was fantastic and pulled me in right away. It lost steam after that for me -I want to hear more about who he was [what made him different] and if I don't have to feel guilty for his death what can I do about it? All of the points that you made are very valid but the solution needs more emphasis. I really like the direction this going and it is well worth reworking. My opinion.
Maxx .
06/11/05
no lemon pie here. yea, the flow could be tighter... but excellent concept and an enjoyable read.
Suzanne R
06/11/05
I really liked this piece. The repetition of 'The End' ... only it WASN'T the end ... was really catchy. Your points were good. The way you concluded (not ended) was powerful. I agree it could be tighter but don't quite see how. I think you did a great job. It had a strong message. Well done.
Lynda Lee Schab 
06/11/05
See, B? This is why you're still hanging out in the Advanced level. Because this was an ADVANCED entry! I absolutely loved it. The concept, the writing, the message. You made a powerful point. For me, this one's a winner.
Blessings, Lynda
Pat Guy
06/11/05
You can see all the threads of the "complete story" in your challenge for us to remember to also include the reality of God's Power that is at work each and everyday. Each part of the story is "not the end!" Very good.
LINDA GERMAIN 
06/13/05
Here's what I have to say about what YOU said: AMEN, AMEN, and AMEN! :0)