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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Every Dark Cloud has a Silver Lining" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (02/28/08)
One or two in my twenties
No one will notice, in the back, barely visible to most
No bother, so few to cause such a worry
I easily ignore them.

Noticeable changes in my early thirties
Salt and pepper is the rage, some even pay for this look
No bother, everybody has a few
I claim them as my heritage.

The end of that decade draws near
Every morning there is another and another, everyone will know
Much bother, doom and gloom ensue, how can this happen
I am much too young.

The forties come storming in
Leaving a wake of evidence that mid-life is eminent
No bother, I wear them as a badge of honor
I deserve every one.

This decade decides to shake things up
More, many more join the party on my noggin
No bother, some days the mirror is my friend when it hides the proof
I take note on other days when every one apparent.

Tomorrow I’ll be forty seven
Curly gray ringlets frame my face
No bother, I have decided to wear my halo
I see it as a sign that my time is near.

Soon, if God wills, I’ll be approaching the half way point
Each day, my badge reminds me that the day of all days is near
No bother, I want to go home, I’m willing when He is ready
I look forward to seeing God, and to see how he sees me.

If more decades He allows
Oh the changes I will see, sixties, seventies, eighties, nineties
No bother, a ripe old age is in the cards
I want to wear it well.

Will He see the wild and rampant twenty-year-old
Please, forget the thirties and the forties not so hot
No bother, for the future, for surely only He knows
I want to claim my silver halo and find my peace in Him.
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Verna Cole Mitchell 
03/07/08
I wondered what would be "no bother" and was delighted with your silver halo ending--very appropriate to the topic. I like how you built up your poem to the glorious future.
Shirley McClay
03/07/08
I love the no bother in every stanza as compared to the one much bother! It really set that stanza apart as being a time of struggle.
Marita Vandertogt
03/09/08
Hey - nice take on the aging process, and very good perspective. I like the format - easy to read and very relatable!
Betty Castleberry
03/12/08
Boy, can I relate to this. Like the format. Nicely done.
Sharlyn Guthrie
03/12/08
The repetition of "no bother" in each stanza is very effective. My suggestion would be to use the same punctuation you would use for prose, including periods and question marks. Overall, though, very creative and nice work!
Joshua Janoski
03/12/08
I have never written in this format, so I am not one to really critique it, but I will say that I think you did a wonderful job., It was easy to follow, and I liked the attitude of the MC.

I don't have a struggle with gray hair; I have a struggle with losing my hair. LOL. Oh well, like your story says, each one that falls out just brings me closer to meeting my wonderful Creator. :)
LauraLee Shaw
03/12/08
Wow! I loved this, and what a great idea for the topic!
Mandy White
03/12/08
Being in my thirties now, this touched me. Thanks!
Sara Harricharan
03/12/08
Pretty good! A different take on the topic, and especially an interesting journey as we travel through the years.

"I take note on other days when every one apparent."
This line read awkwardly for me, not sure why, but otherwise, the rest of the pace seemed fine. Nice job. ^_^
Jan Ackerson
03/12/08
Excellent! The repetition of "no bother" is superb, and the line "I have decided to wear my halo" really got me smiling. I enjoyed this very much.
Patty Wysong
03/12/08
I like this! Silver is truly a halo, and can be worn well. This was a fun look at it. :)
Sherry Hoffcastel 
03/12/08
So this is what I have to look forward to! Lol. Thanks for the fun romp through the process of aging. I panic at the sight of one gray hair. I don't want to think about me at 50. Cute story.
Joanne Sher 
03/12/08
Very, very clever - you've got me thinking about my motives for coloring...(yes, I just said that for all to read LOL). Enjoyed this read.
Beckie Stewart
03/13/08
What a great way to display getting gray hair....a crown! Liked this poem.
Leigh MacKelvey
03/19/08
I'm always looking for the poets on FW! Very nice poem, some wit, some some melancholy, but no regret!
I liked this very much.