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Topic: Fearful (08/23/07)
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TITLE: In Spite Of Fear | Previous Challenge Entry
By Patricia Williams
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I climbed a mountain of failure,
To reach a peak of success.
In securing the ground of my future,
To conquer life’s unanswered quest.
The mountain towered to heaven,
Hiding its top in the clouds.
Solid and stable it seemed to my eye,
Where I stood on the lowly ground.
My feet were shod with courage,
The gloves on my hands hid my fear.
The hat on my head gave protection.
Yet it covered my listening ear,
Tightening my grip I began to climb,
The rugged mountain ahead,
Not really knowing its danger,
I started without a dread.
The steps became harder and harder,
As I gained on its reach to the sky.
I held secure to my reasons,
As I slipped when being tried.
I gained in quickness and wisdom,
From the slips of a careless foot.
Or maybe from faulty standing
On ground that had no root.
Sometimes the jags were slippery,
I trusted before I proved.
But ignorance gave way to wisdom,
Speeding my every move.
Now standing atop the mountain,
Success beneath my feet.
The clouds have covered my failures,
My vision is clear and neat.
Others may stand much taller,
On mountains higher than mine.
Success is not judged by riches,
But crowned by the peace one finds.
Content with my peak I have conquered,
Not fearful to leave its top.
I travel my road of failure
Made firm by the lessons it taught.
Now free to bring those fearful to climb,
To view around my peak.
So they will dare to climb their own,
And find the success they seek.
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Poetry of this type should be punctuated as if it were prose; hence, you don't really need punctuation at the end of every line. I noticed that most of your first lines had commas, and many of them are unnecessary. When you punctuatly more naturally, your poem loses its "sing-song" rhythm. I'd encourage you to experiment with this.
There's a lot of encouragement in this poem, which uses the topic very well.