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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)
I needed a place
to look into God's face
and share all my troubles in prayer.

The people around
and distractions abound
made me long for a refuge from there;

A place I could know of His care.


In nature, it seemed
was the place where I'd dreamed
I'd commune with the Lord as I pray.

Yet I strolled through the park
and I heard a remark
from a stranger I passed on the way.

"Please help me!" the man seemed to say.


I looked in his eyes
and to my surprise
I found I could see in his soul.

His anger and pain
each loss and each gain
were there for my eyes to behold.

He was aching to be in control.


His hopes were all shattered
his dreams, torn and tattered.
How he longed for his heartache to cease.

So I reached out my hand
and hoped he'd understand
that I wanted to help him find peace.

My Lord Jesus could give him release.


So we sat and we shared
and our hearts God repaired
and the lesson we learned in the end:

that the most ideal way
to find God when you pray
is to come to the aid of a friend.
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Member Comments
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Date
Patty Wysong
05/24/07
Oh, I like!! The form and delivery add to the message--and what a message. Sharing and praying with friends, and then how God repaired the hearts. Very good! :-)
Julie Arduini
05/25/07
Great message and so very well written. I liked this one a lot.
Mo
05/26/07
Nice ending. & I liked the start, too!
Sharlyn Guthrie
05/26/07
Very nice! I especially like your title and the ending.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
05/26/07
The rhythm drew me, but the message held me.
Donna Howard
05/27/07
This is good! It reads easily and has a great message. Very nice.
Rhonda Clark
05/28/07
Wonderful form and flow. This was a great read.
Sharon Henderson
05/29/07
Per your request, I'd love to give you some 'helpful' feedback on the content but it's just too beautifully written.

Henry Clemmons
05/29/07
Nice pace, message, good word choices. Well done.
Debbie OConnor
05/29/07
Excellent! I love it. I so admire those who are able to actually write poetry. I just pretend! :)
Leigh MacKelvey
05/29/07
Ya changed the title on me ... had to wait until hinting! Love the rhyyme and meter. Very simply stated message and stated so clearly within the poetic form.
Betty Castleberry
05/29/07
I really like the format you used. Good message, too. This is nicely done.
Myrna Noyes
05/29/07
Wonderful story and great message in this well-structured poem! I have taken many prayer walks in my life, and on them I have both ministered to and been ministered unto! Good job! :)
David Butler
05/29/07
That is so good! A great message so well crafted. Consistent in form right through. Negative comments? Hmmmm.. That's a tough one! :)
Jacquelyn Horne
05/29/07
Beautiful poetry here. Much depth in the pov.
william price
05/30/07
Thank God for main characters like this. The world needs more.
I love a poem when you can feel the writer's heart. Great job, superb message. A-plus!
God bless.
dub W
05/30/07
A well written message - an extended prayer.
Donna Powers
05/30/07
Very nice. There is serenity in the picture painted by these words. Thanks for sharing this
Benjamin Graber
05/30/07
Neat poem - I really liked the ending!
Rita Garcia
05/30/07
Great form! May we all take more "Prayer Walks." Blessings!
LaNaye Perkins
05/30/07
Such a beautiful message and poem. Well done!
Pat Guy
05/30/07
I LOVED the simplicity of everything about this. It's perfect all around.

I loved it - truly.
Edy T Johnson
05/30/07
Oh my, this is precious! I love how so few words in poetry can paint masterpiece pictures in the reader's mind. You do it so well in rhythm and rhyme and with the perfect message-clincher at the end. I think this is another one for the "favorites!" Thank you, too, for commenting on my sonnets-entry. Much appreciated, Friend!
Bryan Coomes
05/31/07
Smooth, simple, and sweet. This was an easy read with a powerful and compelling message. Nice work!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
05/31/07
Hooray Joanne! You're a winner! Always a winner, but this time again in Faith Writers' Challenge! This is well deserved.
Teri Wilson
05/31/07
Yea Joanne!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is wonderful and a well-deserved win.
Venice Kichura
05/31/07
This is beautiful, Joanne!
Congratulations on a well-deserved win!
Sara Harricharan
05/31/07
Congrats Joanne! This was simply beautiful! ^_^
Marty Wellington 
05/31/07
Congratulations Joanne--This was simply beautiful. I loved the structure and story within this lovely poem.
Pat Guy
05/31/07
Hey girl! Way-to-go! Congratulations - this is a very special poem. Love,
Pat
Catrina Bradley
05/31/07
Joanne, this is utterly fabulous - the poem and the message. Congrats!!!
Marilyn Schnepp 
05/31/07
A fantastic job Jo! And a kudos for your EC nomination. So happy for you - and I agree with the Judges, this is truly a great poem with true heart - and a sincere message! Congratulations!
Pam Carlson-Hetland
05/31/07
I must confess that I am neither a writer nor reader of poetry. But this one's simplicity and easy flow was a delight to read. And the message is just wonderful. What an excellent piece of writing! And congratulations!
Myrna Noyes
05/31/07
CONGRATULATIONS, Joanne! This is a very special poem, and I'm glad it won! :)
Tabiatha Tallent
05/31/07
This is beautifully written. Congrats!
Sheri Gordon
05/31/07
Congratulations. This is really well written. Such a powerful, yet simple, message. Loved the meter and flow. Good job.
Valerie Routhieaux
06/02/07
Wow! Good job. Congratulations on your 3rd place win.
Helen Paynter
06/08/07
Joanne, I havent been around much the last couple of weeks, which is why I haven't got around to reading or congratulating you until now.
Anyway, this is lovely - very simple, very heartfelt, very beautiful. Congratulations! (Does this move you up to level 4? :) )
Janice Fitzpatrick
06/11/07
Wow Joanne. This is simply beautiful. I love poetry anyways as you can se that alot of my entries are just that. I love the way you show how God shows himself through our service. The Lord has shown me too over and over again when I am in need of an answer or I'm feeling down if I become a servant and reach out to others not only am I helping another but my soul is lifted too. Praise God. You rhyme and meter is awesome! Thank you so much too hon for your kind encouraging words to my previous submissions. Nice job Joanne!Way to girl. Congrats on winning 3rd place.You deserved it!!:0)Janice
Grace V
12/19/09
Very nice article! This evening as I was spending time with the Lord and friends updating our blogs, we decided to browse your blog. Everyone in the room expressed 'Wow!!! It very nice! Very creative! God bless!