The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice story and even nicer pastor who seemed very dedicated to his flock.
12/10/06
I like this! The first half, rich in dialog, is particularly good.

I'm not sure you need the last few sentences...

I liked that all parties were a bit nervous, and the fact that the daughter was the catalyst for the couple's eventual salvation.
12/11/06
Oh yes, Pastors can be a real blessing. I really liked the story. You told it well. God bless.
12/12/06
This felt so real. I love all the little details that you wove into the story - it definitely made it feel authentic. I was sitting right there with you. Love the touches of humor as well.
This was a good read. I could feel the nervousness this young lady was feeling. Thank you for sharing this.
We sat opposite them on the love seat trying hard to look like we entertained clergy everyday -- I love this sentence. You have told a "real" story about "real" people. So often we feel we have to clean up our act before we come to God, when He really just wants us just as we are. I like it. Blessings, Cheri
12/12/06
Very, very nice story and a wonderful tribute to a good pastor. Thanks for sharing this.
12/14/06
Has a ring of a true story - is it? Even if not, this is good writing, well thought out and enjoyable. thank you.