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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Inner Strength (04/20/06)
While you were away,
My life went on
With happy times and sad times,
Times of loss and pain.

No fault of yours,
Just stating the fact
That time and trouble
Take no man into account.

I tried to write about the good things
In my life.
Like many other times,
I failed.
And now I express my passion in pain.

Though momentarily the themes of
My life may change,
My remorse is not
In wrenching trouble
But in trouble's seeming eternity.

But even in this low perspective
In the grand scheme of things,
I have found in this day
A new opportunity
To see life in a different way.

I understand that suffering
Does not exclude God's love,
But rather the depth of it
Breaks forth and reveals itself
As true.

Inner turmoil, curses and ire
For me are part reality.
The whole truth is:
Till Christ be formed in me,
Daily I will face seeming eternities.
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Date
Marilyn Schnepp 
04/27/06
I didn't get the drift - but then I'm not an expert in prose; but thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Carla Feagans
04/27/06
I'm not sure I understood the first part as far as who was away or how that related to this, but I loved the last three stanzas - both the sentiment as well as the writing.
Daniele Moskal
04/27/06
I'm so SORRY but I didn't capture where on earth this article was going from the start to the finish!!!

I have some idea of prose or poetry but I'm afraid in all honesty, I could not get into this one - sorry!

Please remember that "correction is not rejection", okay! God bless and keep writing, don't ever, ever, give up!!!!!!
Helen Paynter
04/27/06
I had to read this two or three times, but it very much grew on me. I agree, the last three stanzas are rather profound. Some of it was a bit puzzling, though...
Sue Dent
04/28/06
Well, I read it once and believe it is referring to someone struggling to be strong in very bad situations, letting those situations overwhelm them, trying to rationalize why God would allow them to go through such hard times instead of using the strength he provides to pull them through. Someone who eventually sees the truth of the matter. Just because things are difficult doesn't mean God isn't there, just that he is there in a more profound way. I could be way off with this, but it wouldn't be the first time. I thought this was very well written!
Jan Ackerson
04/28/06
The last section is particularly satisfying.
darlene hight
04/29/06
I understand that suffering
Does not exclude God's love,
But rather the depth of it
Breaks forth and reveals itself
As true.

This poem was rich with depth. It makes me ponder and that makes it a good read. IMHO
Maxx .
05/04/06
Actually, this seemed pretty straightforward. A person dealing with life alone, unable to express or experience joy / happiness turns instead to expressing pain only. Then the key stanza:

Though momentarily the themes of
My life may change,
My remorse is not
In wrenching trouble
But in trouble's seeming eternity.

It's not that there is trouble that causes the problem, but that the person choose to wallow and dwell on it ... trouble's last an eternity. BUT, the author has learned a new truth...God's love breaks forth and reveals itself during those times of troubles.

I think very well done... put together in a crisp precise way. Excellent job!