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Very intense and gripping story. A light shining into a pit of darkness.
Good attempt, but could have gone deeper in to his feelings. At least we know the environmental factors that pushed him to destruction. How come he never responded to his wife's faith? Did she even try to tell him? Didnt understand this sentence: "Realizing that I was more distressed, he left me, asking" I would think his comforter would have stayed.
Dare to go deeper! Use every word you have.

Very powerful story. The priest didn't stay, but he left a Comforter alright, he left the Bible. It made a difference to the story-teller in the end.
Needed more to explain why he was driven to do what he did. Gripping and suspenseful.
Wow. What a heart wrenching story.
You communicated something of his self-hatred. A powerful piece.