The Official Writing Challenge
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As I read the story, I remembered the verse, God works all things out for good.
This is beautiful. I think you did an excellent job of coming up with a very creative story that shows how bad times can be a blessing. Be careful you don't give the ending away with the title. It's nice to have alliteration, but it kind of gives away the ending. (Adults will see where you're going, but kids might not.) I think you should tweak this, have it edited, and find an illustrator. It would make a great picture book.
This was fabulous!
WEll done,
I agree with Shann!

Clever and unique. I agree that this story would make an excellent children's book.

My suggestions would be to use more white space and rewrite part of the last line. I wasn't sure if the down of the fawn was referring to its fur or something else.
God does speak to us through nature, and you tell this beautiful story so well. I concur about a children's book. It would surely be a favorite. God bless.
I really thought this story would place. I still think it has lots of potential. I think I would ask for a report to see what marks the judges gave it.