The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a fascinating story. It's timing coincides quite nicely with the election.

For me personally, the ellipses were a distraction. Like many experts suggest, I believe ellipses, em dashes and exclamation points should be used sparingly. Using them often takes away the impact that they are meant to have. Plus you do such a great job of picking just the right verbs, that you don't need the punctuation to do your pausing or exclaiming.

I liked how the ending brought the story full circle. You did a nice job of building the content and describing the scenes as they unfolded. Good job.
Some great ideas and characterising, but it needs some spacing to bring out the clarity of your message.