The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an interesting story. You had me smiling as I pictured the sweet innocent name--Marigold launching out to defend her territory.

The jump from the snake to the cat felt a bit sudden for me. I wonder if perhaps you told the story from the cat's POV if it wouldn't pull the reader more into the story by allowing you to broaden the story.

I like how even though an escaping snake can be irksome, children were still allowed to love and nurture their friends. I remember when we agreed to babysit a snake once so the owners could have the in-laws over sine the relative wouldn't step foot in a house that had a snake in it. Soon my sister became quite attached to Corina and snake-feeding night at the Hall's became a routine party. You did a nice job of bringing your pets into the story.
A great example of showing as well as telling.