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TITLE: Blessed Are The Meek | Previous Challenge Entry
By Carla Procida
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When my parents died several years ago they left my five siblings and I an inheritance, divided up equally among us For my husband and I it was a fairly substantial sum yet in a millionaire’s eyes it would be considered a mere drop in the proverbial bucket. Yet the thought of inheriting the Earth, (think about it, THE EARTH), even to a billionaire it would be more than mind blowing!
If you think about it, “owning” the earth is what nations fight over, why wars are declared. Greedy men and women work very hard and with whatever means it takes in order to get as big a chunk of this planet as they can without going to jail first. Ecologists claim it for their mother nature and parents for their children and those to follow after. This revolving sphere is mishandled by those who seek its hidden treasures, sought after by the power hungry and misguided religious zealots without at time any regard for human life. A ball of confusion staggering like a drunken man yet one day promised to be the inheritance of the saints of God “reformed” by His own nail scarred hands.
Earth. In the Father’s will; designated property to those who are in fact not easily provoked to anger; who patiently bear, and put up with injuries and affronts. Those in the race and those who will walk carrying themselves courteously and affably to all, the elect through the blood of the Lamb who have the meanest thoughts of themselves, and the best of others. They are those who envy not the gifts and graces of other men and willing to be instructed and admonished by even the meanest of the saints, They quietly submit to the will of God in adverse dispensations of providence; and ascribe all they have, and are, to the grace of God.
For all who define “meek” as “weak” are surely mistaken. It takes a strong man or women (in the Lord) to possess this quality and one day soon, to possess the Earth.
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My tiny bit of red ink is in this line: they left my five siblings and I an inheritance, the I should be me. A good way to double-check is to take out the first part. You wouldn't say he left I (or For) I so you know it's left (or For) my siblings and me. I also notice some sentences that were missing a period. A good challenge buddy or critique group would help catch those things. If you can't find one on the message boards, and are interested, feel free to PM me.
One of the things I liked best about this piece is you just focused on one of the beatitudes and didn't try to cover too many different topics. By doing that you allow yourself and your reader to really think about just that one thing. It's difficult sometimes to focus just on one or two Bible verses. We have such a passion in our message that it's not easy to wrangle ourselves in but by doing that you allow someone new to the idea not to feel overwhelm. I really commend you for that. It's a lesson that took me a long time to learn. Nice job. I did enjoy this piece. :)