The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a spectacular job on this piece. I knew I was being taught an important lesson. That and the suspense made me want to keep reading.

You had a few glitches with punctuation- mainly needing capitalization at some of the starts of a quote.

I think this was a great read. I enjoyed the characters and the dialog felt natural. You were on topic and I think the message is one we all can remember. I liked the ending but don't think you needed to spell out the moral of the story as you did an excellent job of showing it with your words.
You about gave me a heart attack reading this! (I guess that is a good recommendation, but...) I am afraid of heights and would have stayed on that ledge, for sure. I reckon if God gave me the grace to jump, I would have, but it wouldn't have been my first choice. Great job of writing!
Wow - this was riveting and I was fidgeting in my seat. I'm a "sucker" for happy endings...and realize that life doesn't always guarantee those. So, I was upset with Joe's untimely demise. But, an excellent message about "God and a leap of faith" - nice pun with emphasis on "leap" - but the double entendre didn't go unnoticed.

Trust God and He will never let you down. Nicely done.

God Bless~
Not the usual take for a story, but the message comes through very well. Nice touch!