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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Feel (emotions) (08/26/10)
Aching heart bruised by empty loss
Bitter tears fall like scalding rain
Captured by God’s gently cupped hand
Dripped into vials spun with gold and etched in silver

Eternity’s perfume imbued with bitter myrrh
Fragrance of sacrifice mixed with blood red tears
Given as an offering of pain

Heaven waits as angels observe
In silent anticipation of impending grace

Jagged lightning blazes and bursts
Kaleidoscope colors across the optic sea
Lambent flickering of mosaic light
Moves across piercing shattered shards

Nothing is hidden and naked grief is exposed
Omniscient He sees each disconsolate dream
Pounding pulses of a broken heart He soothes

Quiets with love that was borne on a cross
Rest is offered in sacred stillness

Softly held is the agony of crushing despair
That sears with burning misery
Until it is relinquished with unclasped fist
Vesicant pain like splashes of acid drain and fall

Waiting nail-scarred hands catch descending drops
Xeric eyes are washed with heaven’s dew
Yesterday’s tears mingle with fragile faith

Zibeline comfort shrouds with sable warmth
Aching heart embraced with promised hope
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Jeanne E Webster
09/04/10
You sent me to the dictionary on this one. A most visual poem; the reader can "see" the written effects. This is to be read very slowly in order to absorb the full impact. You have dressed your work in the finest words. A beautiful description of God's healing balm during eternity. Your piece was a challenge to comprehend but a delight to taste. Blessings. :)
AnneRene' Capp
09/05/10
Simply said, this is poetic beauty! Truly wonderful descriptions that burrowed into the crevices of emotions.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/06/10
Wow that definitely took a lot of talent- to express those emotions in verse and in abc order.
Caitlyn Meissner
09/09/10
I didn't know why you were using hard words like Xeric until I noticed this was done in ABC style. Good job, even if I have to go look xeric up now. ;)
Rachel Phelps
09/09/10
Wow, I'm impressed by the ABC style here. Cool idea and well executed.
Ruth Brown
09/09/10
A mosttouching poem. Well done.
Cheryl Harrison
09/09/10
I read this one twice. I too was very impressed by the ABC style. Good job!
Terry Lee
09/09/10
Congratulations on your well-deserved first place win. What a beautiful, moving and emotional piece.

It's as if every word were hand picked with precision and care, adding incredible depth and emotion.
Maria Egilsson
09/09/10
I am stunned, honestly!
Gina Fifo
09/09/10
Congratulations! Beautiful poem!
Beth LaBuff 
09/11/10
Wonderful creativity with this acrostic-type poem. Beautiful message and word choices. Maria, congrats on your Editor's Choice award.
Troy Manning
09/12/10
Congratulations Marissa! Oftentimes a preconceived form becomes conspicuous. Like Caitlyn, it wasn't until "Xeric" that I caught on. Thanks for the vocab lesson! :)