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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Wow! (03/11/10)
Dear Mom,

I turned fourteen today. Daddy, Deedee and me went out to dinner, then we saw a movie. The movie was silly. It was a Cartoon, but you know Dad, he doesn't realize I'm growing up now. He still wants me to be his baby girl.

The other day, I wore lipstick and eyeliner and I looked really really pretty. It was Sarah's. She brought it to school with her and I tried it on in the girls bathroom. Then I remembered the story you told me about how you use to always wear makeup. You felt that you had to wear it in order to be pretty. You were embarrassed to ever be seen in public with out it. But then God began to show you your true beauty. You decided to accept your natural beauty and stopped wearing makeup. That's good Mom. I know it was hard for you at first, but then you loved you for you. I'm not even going to ask Dad for permission to wear it. I want to love me for me first.

Mom, I really need to talk to you. Remember you said, when I get older and really need to talk to you, I should write you a letter. Well, that's what I'm doing. Deedee has a boyfriend now, plus she hangs out with her college friends a lot. She's got her studies too so she doesn't have much time for me right now. . I feel really lonely. I talk to Dad, but he's a man, ya know. He can't really understand me and there's things I just can't open up to him about.

I do talk to God though. I tell God everything just like you taught me to do. Mom, Right now, I need to make some serious decisions. Some of my friends at school are not the best people for me to hang with. This I know. But, I'm lonely Mom. I don't want to be the outcast. My heart wants to do what's right, but I'm lonely and bored. I like having fun. I like to feel loved, like I belong somewhere. Sarah and Renae make me feel that way. But, they curse and talk about people, back talk teachers and the like. We played a really funny trick on Mrs. Jacobs and got the whole class in trouble. We put gum in her chair and she sat right down on it and never even knew. Then she went to stand up and her dress stuck in the big wad of gum and pulled her chair along with her. Oh my gosh, Mom, I know it was bad, but we laughed so hard, I thought we'd die. It was soooo funny. Mom, I like doing stuff like that. I like being bad, it's fun. I don't like trying to be the good person all the time. But then, when I come home and tell this to God in my room, it makes me want to cry cause I really want to please Him. I want to be good.

There's a war going on inside of me and I'm sad because I don't know which way to go. I can't leave my friends. I love them and I need them. But I can't leave God either. I love Him and I need Him. I need to have fun, it's my personality. I like making people laugh and playing jokes. But I love pleasing God and doing what's right. I want to make Him proud of me. So, I have this dilemma. I'm so afraid I'm going to make the wrong decision, but what would my life be like with out God. Oh Mom, just horrible. So, I sit here writing to you and crying. I wish you were here with me. I wish you could hold me right now and tell me what to do. I know what you'd say. Do what's right. Follow my heart. Do what God would want me to do.

Mom, if I turn your name upside down it spells Wow. I was thinking about that the other day. Wow you were so awesome. Wow, you showed me so much love. Wow, you gave me such wisdom. Even when you're gone, your Words are still here comforting me. Your love surrounds me. I won't let you down. I won't let God down. I won't let Dad and Deedee down. I'll do what's right. God will show me what to do.
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Janice Fitzpatrick
03/18/10
This is touching and I like the MC's youthful voice. I almost wrote a piece about turning the wow upside down to show mom. When my son, a very early reader, who at 3, was trying to spell words out, was amazed at this new finding of his. It always stuck in my mind and made me want to live up to this expression. I pray though I fail sometimes that I can be a "wow" daily and a blessing to anyone who I meet. Keep on writing. This is good.
Dana McReynolds
03/19/10
I love this. You really captured the girl's struggles. Truly realistic.
Joan Campbell
03/21/10
This is a very touching article, which shows your young MC's deep internal struggle very well. I love the subtle way the guidance and direction come in the end. It reminds me of that "aah" moment one often has in prayer. Lovely!
AnneRene' Capp
03/22/10
Boy, I just wanted to climb right into this story, and mother this little girl myself. You did a truly great job at portraying her inner turmoil as a teenager. I wish all teenagers had this particular struggle.
c clemons
03/25/10
Would have liked to see an ending but on this to make like a real letter. Overall good job.