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Powerful in its subtility. A strong undercurrrent that rises in waves to meet our emotions reading this.
This is very powerful and heart wrenching.
What a wonderful tale of love and devotion. The grief was palpable.
You really did a beautiful job conveying this woman's new loss, the freshness of it,her mind and heart both vying to be in charge. I love that you use querido. A beautiful term of endearment hard to translate- so much more than darling. The only red pen thing I have to offer is to maybe lessen the repetitive thoughts/actions- but then, I think it adds a bit, too-- it's realistic to think it over & over. Nicely done.
Anyone who has ever walked a "million miles" around a bed that holds the body of a recently departed loved one will deeply identify with the words you have written. Your writing is both tender and strong.
Very touching. It conveys both human grief and heaven's peace and hope. Well written.