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Topic: Empty and Full (06/04/09)
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By Jan Ackerson
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Throughout the skit, the audience hears voice-overs (VO) of the thoughts of the two characters on stage, broadcast through speakers at stage left for Theresa and stage right for Don.
Don is seated, reading the newspaper. Theresa enters from stage left, sits in the second chair, and sighs loudly.
Don: Hey, bacon’s on sale at Kroger.
Don VO: Sure would like some bacon this week.
Theresa: (another loud sigh) Hmm.
Theresa VO: Is he deaf? I’ve sighed twice!
There is a short silence, then Theresa reaches over, grabs a section of newspaper, and snaps it open. She rustles the pages and appears to read. With a glance at Don, she tosses the newspaper aside.
Theresa: Tomorrow’s Friday already.
Theresa VO: That’s trash day, Don. Trash day!
Don: Short week, huh?
Don VO: Sure would like some bacon this week.
Theresa: So…yeah, Friday. Trash day.
Theresa VO: Put down the newspaper and empty the trash!
Don: (he turns a few pages of the newspaper) Oh man, gas prices are going up again.
Don VO: Did she leave a full gas tank in the Suburban? She knows I like her to keep it filled. Wonder if she’s going to buy some bacon.
Theresa: Doesn’t Ready Disposal want us to leave the trash can at the street pretty early in the morning?
Theresa VO: I’m trying not to nag here…but EMPTY THE TRASH ALREADY!
Don: (absently) Yeah…hey, did you drive out to your sister’s house Monday?
Don VO: Gas was cheap on Monday, you should have filled it up then. I wonder if I should mention that sale on bacon again.
Theresa: (sighing one more time) Yes, Don, I drove to my sister’s house on Monday. (a beat) Did you know that in their subdivision, they have trash pickup twice a week? Twice a week, Bob has to take the trash to the curb. (she waits) Do you wish we had trash pick up twice a week?
Theresa VO: Don! Don! DON! Empty the trash! How many ways do I have to say it?
Don: Nah, we don’t generate that much trash. So…did you notice the gas prices on Monday?
Don VO: You’d notice if you’d filled it up. Mmmmm, bacon.
Theresa: No, Don. I did not notice gas prices on Monday.
Theresa VO: Just like you don’t notice that the kitchen trash can is full.
Don: (now he’s annoyed) Well, they’ve taken quite a jump. It’s going to cost a small fortune to fill it up this weekend.
Don VO: You’d drive that thing fifty miles past empty, wouldn’t you, just to avoid having to pump it yourself? You know…I think I’d eat bacon with every meal if I could.
There is a long and silent pause. Theresa glances at Don, and Don glances at Theresa, but at different moments.
The next bit of voice-over dialogue overlaps by a few words; Theresa begins, but Don finishes.
Theresa and Don VO: I wish you’d hear what I’m saying to you..
After another short silence:
Theresa and Don VO: I wish you wanted to make me happy.
The silence stretches out as Theresa and Don perform a few actions: Don finishes reading and then clicks the remote at an unseen television. Theresa gathers the newspaper and some magazines into a neat pile, then picks up a crossword puzzle and begins to solve it.
And now the audience hears a third character in voiceover, projected from speakers in all areas of the auditorium.
Voice: Hey there…it’s Thursday already. I’ve missed you! I’ve got a few things to say to you—is now a good time? Hello?
Theresa? Don? I just wanted to say…do you know how precious you are to me? I had some things to show you this morning—I made an excellent sunrise, and the trees are starting to bud. The whole earth was full of my glory, in fact, and I was hoping you’d notice. Maybe sing me a few bars of that song…
There is no noticeable increase in the activity onstage, nor do the characters appear to hear the voice.
Voice: I wish you’d hear what I’m saying to you.
Theresa sighs.
Voice: I wish you wanted to make me happy.
Don clicks to another channel.
The lights dim.
Voice: (from the darkness) Theresa? Don?
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I am so petrified to attempt a skit-type piece myself, but this was the perfect scene for it. Loved every word. Bravo!
Seriously though, I love the creativity. Painful, ouch!
This is rich. Really gets the point across and who would question the lesson?
Special.
Mona
Jan - I love this entry. Wonderful writing, meaningful message.
Your work is. in a word: inspirational.