The Official Writing Challenge
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A very vivid piece, with great battle descriptions. It took me a little bit to keep things straight, but once I did I enjoyed it very much.
A unique piece. I, too, was a bit confused by the names. But, it did not distract from the message of the story. Good work.
What I really liked about this story was that I could see everything. You did a remarkable job with your descriptions. I also liked how the story opened the way for the MC to tell about Jesus. After hearing the story, they could relate to someone giving their life on behalf of others. Incredibly well done!
I read this once, came back and read it again, then again. You let me see the characters and hear the voices. This is a good skill for a writer to have. Well done, I enjoyed this very much.