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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Snap (09/04/08)
You have absolutely no idea
Who you are messing with
Do you?

You think you know.
You think it’s Mickey Dripping

Don’t presume that
Just because my hair is combed the same way is it was yesterday
Just because I am wearing my school uniform like I always do
I am the same person I was yesterday

Today
Just like yesterday
And the day before that
You may think you can knock my pencil case off the table
Snigger
And swagger back to your seat
And I will not bat an eyelid
Try it and see

Mickey
Will not be dripping
Today

I've had enough!
You have stretched the elastic band
Of my patience to breaking point
With the words you whisper behind my back
With the words you speak to my face
With the words you scrawl on the desk you sit at

So
Not quietly and gently
But suddenly and unexpectedly
I am going to snap
Stinging the hand that gets in the way

If only your insults had been
Original
Creative
Witty even
I could perhaps forgive
But your vocabulary is
Limited
Predictable
Crude and
Wholly lacking in imagination

Everything is “gay”
I am “gay” because
I don’t play football
I don’t watch football
I don’t like football
I am “gay” because
I write poems
I read books
I do my homework

So today
If you knock my pencil case off the table
If you snatch my bag and hide it in the cupboard
If you call me “gay”
Let me tell you what I will do
Let me spell it out

I will pray for you
Laugh if you will, but
You see,
When I pray
God listens and answers
I am going to pray
That the God who changes the heart’s of people
Will change your heart
And you will change
And there is nothing at all that you can do to stop me
Praying
And there will nothing at all that you can do to stop yourself
Changing

Mickey
Will not be dripping
Today




Author’s note: “Mickey Dripping” was my brother’s nickname at school.
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Member Comments
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Date
Leah Nichols 
09/12/08
Nice work with the free verse! I know a lot of people that feel that way....good job capturing the emotion.
Joanne Sher 
09/13/08
I did NOT expect the ending you gave. Excellent job creating the mood, and "fooling" me into thinking the MC was gonna fight back with his fists. Excellent.
Lynda Schultz 
09/13/08
A couple of slips of the finger on the keyboard: "AS it was yesterday" and "will BE nothing" but this was really, really good. The surprise at the end was great—I thought Mickey was going to give back exactly what he had received too!
Sharlyn Guthrie
09/15/08
I appreciated the footnote. I hope your brother didn't endure all that your MC did. You captured the emotions so well.
Shelley Ledfors
09/16/08
Excellent! Sadly, so many go through things like this. I *love* the way Mickey was going to get back at them!
Kristen Hester
09/16/08
Excellent!This is very powerful. I'm so glad when Mickey snapped, he prayed instead of what I thought was going to happen. Super!
Anne Linington
09/18/08
You gave some excellent descriptions on bullying, though I wasn't wholly convinced by the transition from snapping into prayer..there must be a lot of anger to deal with..perhaps a bit too neat an ending in a real world.