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This was absolutely beautiful. I loved the way you worded your heart's cry. You spoke to my heart. A real winner.
I like your title. I think you ask eternal questions in this poem. "How can such a sinful heart…lead other sinful hearts to You?" You use strong phrases too "eternity encapsulated," "inexorable foe" and "hidden under a bushel-basket of sinful self."
I truly loved makes me want to print it off and tuck it in the pages of my Bible. You perfectly illustrated the heart of a Christian mother; her hopes and fears for her children's lives and salvation.
Wow! Sorry, but that's the only word that came to mind after reading this fantastic masterpiece of pure perfection, filled with beauty, truth and delight! Just magnificently done! So, I'll repeat it again. Wow!
So glad you hinted!
There is much here. I can feel your heart's desire though I have no children myself. GREAT JOB!
So much going on here! Lots of emotion and feeling woven throughout this piece all the way to the end. I liked the last lines best, where it seemed to sum up everything. ^_^
Wonderful - so much truth and much to ponder here.Great job with diction and imagery especially.