The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/08
OOOOhh! Very cleverly woven. Your title is great! (My imagination was going wild after reading it.) I must say...you caught me off guard with Amanda being the goth bully and the math tutor. Good work on this.
02/22/08
I love this from title to end. You built the suspense so well and even managed to put a twist at the end, which is difficult to do with these proverbs. Loved it!
Ouch, I must admit I saw this coming, great story and so right on topic. Keep up the good words, dialog was real to me.
Loved your title and the first line! At first I thought it was a big brother and not a big sister, but the ending was cute. I'm glad that she was able to take care of the bully-lol, but the suspension part...*sigh* that was her own fault. Nice job. ^_^
02/24/08
You've got the teenage voice dead on. Very, very good!
Oh, this is one of my favorites this week. It reminds me of how I took care of my younger brother. Great job!
I, too, saw where it was headed, but enjoyed the ride. Where you got me was with it being a sister, not a brother.