The Official Writing Challenge
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I love the vignettes. Your ending is especially good and the importance of the lessons goes without saying.
I liked the format, and take on the topic.
I did not like not knowing what happened to the two unconscious teens, though that was probably a concession to the word count.
Incredibly creative way to approach the topic. Realistic, too. I'll bet ER doctors and nurses see the message of this proverb NOT lived out all the time... Well done.
As always, Linda, you sucked me into your world - this time the medical scene - and held my attention, top to bottom. Along with your MC I longed for a deeper draught from that cup of hot joe, and since I'm no coffee-drinker that says reams about your skill as a writer. I also liked the way you tied the opening lines where the doctor is fresh and spiffy to the closing: the rumpled lab coat and the good, good tired pf accomplishment.