The Official Writing Challenge
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09/15/07
This is a lovely story! The characters are well described. I could almost see the house and the setting. This seems like a wonderful introduction to a book I could cozy up to on a long winter evening. Start writing the rest, please!
09/17/07
I got to the end of this and breathed a huge sigh of relief--I thought jared was going to die on the plane! I wonder if you did that intentionally, to surprise your readers! At any rate, very sweet story--the only thing it was lacking was a bit of conflict, which I've been told is an essential element in a short story. But it's tender and lovely.
I love the gentleness of the story and the descriptions are perfect.