The Official Writing Challenge
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07/13/07
A great reminder that Jesus loves us and will never lead us astray!
07/13/07
Really nice! I loved the truth in this story and you explained it so well!!:)
You have so clearly and simply demonstrated a wonderful lesson. One correction: the word "phantom" should be "fathom" I would guess.
07/14/07
Wonderful allegory!

A few punctuation problems, and even though you've started each bit of dialogue in a new line, they really should have spaces between them, too.

I can't tell you how many "flowers" I've picked...this story will be in my mind now in similar circumstances.
07/14/07
Great analogy!
I like the simple message of what it means to follow Christ, and the point that we must do some thing to help ourselves instead of asking God to do everything for us. "Phantom" should be "fathom" though, just as an FYI.
07/15/07
So true! You clearly illustrated your points with simplicity without getting preachy in the process.