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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)
Bodoggy and his mother walked to and from school every day, but today was a different day because Bodoggy was going to ride home in a car.

“Mommy,” said Bodoggy, “why do you walk me to school every day?”

Bodoggy’s mother thought for a moment. “Well, sweetie, we live just over the hill, so it's not too far to walk.”

“But, mommy, other puppies ride the bus.”

“Yes, I know Bodoggy, but you're special because you get to walk to school.”

“You said that I will ride home in a car today.”

“That’s right sweetheart, today is a special day.”

“Why is it so special mommy?”

“Well, it’s a sort of secret, but a surprise just for you.”

Bodoggy danced while holding on to his mother’s paw. “Mommy, I love surprises. Tell me now.”

“Oh, Bodoggy, if I told you now it wouldn’t be a surprise.”

“Please, mommy, please. Won’t you tell me?”

His mother laughed at her son’s question. “Oh, sweetie, you'll get your surprise after school, I promise.

When he and his mother arrived at the school building his mother walked clear to his room and talked to his teacher. He didn’t hear what she said, because Bodoggy was busy taking his seat and chatting with the other puppies.

All day long he wondered about his surprise. It wasn’t his birthday and it wasn’t a holiday, in fact it wasn’t any special day at all. Finally, the school bell rang and Bodoggy stood to leave, but the teacher asked him to stay.

Bodoggy was confused. The only other time he had to stay after school was when he pulled Sweetpuppy’s hair. That was not a fun day at all.

After all the puppies left the room the teacher called Bodoggy to the front. “Your mother told me about your big surprise today. Are you ready?”

Bodoggy shook with excitement. He thought, even the teacher knows about my surprise. “Yes ma’am. I am ready,” he giggled and yelped.

The teacher winked at someone behind Bodoggy. “Then turn around because there’s someone here to see you,” she said.

He did exactly as the teacher asked. And, there standing in the doorway was Popdoggy, Bodoggy’s father. Popdoggy was dressed in his full Army uniform, because he had just returned from a land far away.

Bodoggy ran to his father and jumped into Popdoggy’s outreached paws. “Oh, Popdoggy, I have missed you so. This is the greatest surprise of all and a very special day.”
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Rita Garcia
06/11/07
CUTE! CHARMING! A great story!
Jan Ackerson
06/12/07
SUPER story for very young children with a parent in the military.
Beth LaBuff 
06/12/07
The name Bodoggy is so cute! and what little kid doesn't like a story about a puppy. This was fun!
Joanne Sher 
06/12/07
What a sweet little story. Love the dog's name, and his realistic emotions. Great job!
Dee Yoder
06/13/07
You had me wondering what the surprise was going to be, and I didn't expect the ending, so it worked! I think children like puppy stories and would like this one, too.
Kristen Hester
06/13/07
This is a great children's story. They love it when the characters are animals. Nice story and very well told.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
06/13/07
You always manage to come up with something creative and different and well written. Bodoggy! Now how many parents are going to say "Huh?" when their children read this and ask for a "bodoggy"?
Jacquelyn Horne
06/13/07
Wonderful story for children who are missing their father's because of war. Loved the animal characters. Good job.
Loren T. Lowery
06/13/07
Charming and relevant to today's enviroment. Kids can so easily identify with the Bodoggy and that's what makes this special.
Pamela Kliewer 
06/13/07
You got me with the ending! Good job! I love the names you chose.
Betty Castleberry
06/13/07
This is charming,and simplistic, which is perfect for a children's story. I'm sure lots of kids whose dads (or moms) are away in the service could especially relate to this. You get a medal. ;0)
LaNaye Perkins
06/14/07
I agree, you should get a medal for finding such a wonderful way to relate to our children that have been waiting on military daddy's (and momma's) to come. Well done! -from a soldier's mom.
Sara Harricharan
06/14/07
Nice. The ending was little bit of a let down. I guess I didn't quite catch the car ride part. The name of Bodoggy was cute, but a little overused in the front, otherwise, I liked the little world you created with just dogs. Very nice.
Esther Gellert
06/15/07
This was great. My husband is away on and off with military stuff, and his homecoming is a highlight of my children's life. For anyone who's ever been in this situation, this is a wonderful story. I'm going to read it to my kids.
Catrina Bradley
06/15/07
In my opinion, perfectly written for children. I like the ending, myself. I was seeing myself closing the book and sighing after reading it to my nieces. :) I love this line: "The only other time he had to stay after school was when he pulled Sweetpuppy’s hair. That was not a fun day at all." It made me grin. Well done!