The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, this was good. It had me on the edge of my seat.

"She could not remember a time or place she wanted more to be away from." Try to avoid ending sentences with prepositions. Maybe something like "She couldn't remember a time or place where the need to get out was this strong," or something like that. Bad example, but you get the idea. :)

I loved the ending, even if I'm not quite sure I "got" it completely. It was written in a way that any number of explanations would suffice, so it didn't take away from the story.
"Right on, Shelby!" A story well told, and it is true - fortune tellers are indeed featured in the Bible as something to keep away from; thus, this Writer knows whereof she or he speaks. Good job, great message and right on target, topic-wise. Enjoyed the suspense. The writing was super.
LOVED this unique take on the topic! And such great suspense and teaching for us all. It felt so real!