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Topic: JAM (02/09/17)
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By Dorothy MOFFITT
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
with fruit, sugar and heat.
It makes something nice
which is good to eat.
To jam a finger or foot
in a door or machine
is not a good experience,
it is a painful thing.
Traffic jams are
frustrating at best,
to be late for work or
an appointment is a pest.
Jammed in a crowd
is a suffocating thing,
wanting some fresh air
or just out of the cling.
A jammed machine is
a problem to unravel,
a printer paper jam,
or something just as trivial.
To jam a radio frequency
causes much frustration
to those who want to listen
or just find elation.
Jam on car brakes
makes the tyres skid,
you can end up in trouble,
flipped on your lid.
God promised milk and honey
and jam and bread,
to his people wandering,
waiting to be fed.
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I think the ending could be expanded some how. I tried to think of something but I liked the whole thing.
Blessings~
I loved the variations you described for the word jam.
The only thing is I would try to make it flow more, so it feels like everything relates somehow, even if it is describing something different.
But everything you wrote about was spot when it comes to the various forms of jams.
The only red ink is tires is spelled with an "i" and not a "y"...
You might want to do a spell check before submitting.
Nice job.
Nice work and well written with all the rhyming words.
I look forward to reading you in the future.