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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Flowers (10/03/05)
No bouquet of roses given
Makes me smile brighter
Than sunshine puffs
Held out to me
In chubby fists
For me to see,
My child’s expression of her love.

No fancy vase displays this gift,
Picked with such great care.
A sunlit spot,
An old chipped cup,
The golden blooms
Cheer me up.
My child’s gift of dandelions.

No sacrifice of life so sweet
Gives me so much hope
Than nail-scarred hands
Held out to me
For me to grasp
Eternally.
My Savior’s gift of His love.

I have no gift to offer Him.
No earthly prize will do,
But to obey
And seek His face,
To love and know
His wondrous grace.
How can I express my gratitude?

When life is over and I see
The face I long for most.
Will I kneel there
And softly weep,
With dandelions strewn at His feet?
My humble display of my love.
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Member Comments
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Date
Amy Verlennich
10/10/05
Loved this poem... had spots that didn't "flow" real well, but the concept was wonderful! I love dandelions too! Blessings, Amy
Shelley Snyder
10/10/05
I agree with Amy, while there are a few small parts that don't quite flow, it is a great poem. I really loved the final stanza...gave me goosebumps.
Michelle Fout
10/10/05
I don't care that a few lines seemed out of sync. I was tracking with you down memory lane...had clear vision of my 15 year old back when he was toddling around with dandelion puffs and smiles, the humble grace of a babe- then wham you hit me with God's grace. I love the ending. Simple powerful poem of love.
wow.
10/11/05
This is beautiful...What great thoughts in the music of poetic words...Well done...
Jan Ackerson
10/12/05
I really like this a lot--the parallel structure and the free verse format. It flowed quite beautifully, and the final image was unique: dandelions at Jesus' feet!
Melanie Kerr 
10/13/05
Excellent poem - soamny lines that I liked, that evoked memories. I liked the thread of love that was woven through the poem.
Deborah Porter 
10/18/05
Sandra, this was lovely, and have to agree, the dandelions strewn at his feet part was the perfect ending. Beautiful.

This was one of those poems where some feel the rhythm is out, some feel it was fine. I was in the former group, but either way, it was beautiful and you ranked 7th in the Level 2 list, so well done. You also ranked 36th overall, out of a total of 145 entries, so I think you deserve a pat on the back for that as well.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Kate Grey
05/30/07
Beautiful! I loved the ending.