The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
Lots of action and suspense!

Maybe it's just my lack of knowledge, but I'd have liked more to tell me the setting (time and place) of this. Maybe more description?

I'm interested in your narrator, and I'd like to get to know him better, too.
Good action and VERY strong characters. It seems like there's more to the story though than can be fit into a mere 750 words. A good read all around. ^_^
Action packed, suspenseful! Good job! Keep on writing. Very entertaining piece.