The Official Writing Challenge
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You have woven so much into a small space. You made your characters real to me and I especially love this -

"cautiously tread the sea of Making Mother Mad."

Keep writing, you have much to say.
Needs a bit of work but your story well illustrates the difficulties that can arise between hurting people. Keep on writing. God bless you.
I read this with interest (as any mother would). Thank you.
04/26/08
This is great. You've done such a good job portraying the defiance and yet defeat of a teen. I could feel the battle and personal struggle, as well as picture this as it unfolded. Good job!!
04/27/08
Although this is mainly about a mother/daughter relationship, an aunt was thrown in for good measure. And, it seems the aunt did solve the problem...good job.