The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved it! It touched me to the point of a lump in my throat; Short, sweet and to the point. Good job.
This is really a wonderful idea, and the idea of using "His beloved's heart..." is a wonderful tie to the part that comes before, and the part that comes after - tying it all together.

There are a couple of areaas that need to be redone and tightened up, but they are pretty minor to the whole story.

Well done.