The Official Writing Challenge
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This is written in a very strong voice - I really liked how you caught me off gaurd at the end: there was me thinking you were really living in that forest. Nice wry humour. God bless.
I was immediately drawn into the world you've created. You kept kept me moving through it with you, and I became part of the action along with the characters. Well done. May God continue to inspire your creativity and your gift of writing. Thank you for sharing it.
Clever, clever, clever! You had me totally taken in by that game ... I thought it was real.

You're not only a warrior of the Word, you're exceptionally good with words too!

Well done!
Very, very creative. I was totally drawn in. And now that I know the ending can understand some of the symbolism throughout the piece (like the pool that looks good but draws you into its depths). This was so well done. Blessings, Jules.
Sooo coool! And sooooo creative! I enjoyed this soooo much! I really did! Loved the part about getting caught by the 9yr old! How typical! And is there really a game such as this! I would like to know! This is good!
You sucked me right in with your description and connectedness to your character. Your character's engagement with the game was also well written. Great story, too, how often we forget the power of 'the book'.