The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this piece. Your ending really packs a powerful punch. I'm not sure if you needed the first part. The transition was a bit rough. Instead you might have shown the couple's relationship a bit more, and then added the metaphor about the whine of the refrigerator. I could even see the minister working it into a sermon. Your message is a great one. I'm sure many people can relate or know someone like your MC. Again the ending was fabulous. Many struggle with a good ending with the word limit but you make it look easy. This is a thought provoking piece. I enjoyed it, especially the second half. Good job. Keep writing those stories God places on your heart. Your words will touch people more that you could ever imagine.
Powerful conclusion in this entertaining entry.

God bless~
I am so NOT an expert, and I always to hesitate to offer suggestions, but it seems to me that the first three paragraphs might be a little too much explanation. It is the only weak section I find in this piece, and the overall point is wonderful. It is well written and I enjoyed it.