The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story telling. Interesting approach to the topic.

That's a great Bible story!
I suggest that you make it become "real" by showing more action and less telling the story. (You could put the references at the end.)
I like the idea of the craftsman's point of view.
I am not sure if we are supposed to answer to others' comments on our own stories, but I had to laugh out loud when reading Yvonne's comment. It is so ironic. I teach high school English, and I am forever instructing my own students to "show" rather than "tell" the story. And here, I have done the same thing. Thank you for the constructive criticism. I will try very diligently to take your advice. Blessings!
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