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Perfect Title!
Very enjoyable story and smart Mom!
I really enjoyed how you paced this piece by using the mile markers. I could sense the mom's veiled impatience tempered by the love of her kids. It's always a delicate balance, is it not?;)
Good job!
Very good pacing, and I really like the constant "Mom!" So realistic!

Put the mother's thoughts in italics to distinguish them from speech...then you can eliminate the "she thought" tag and save yourself a few more words.

I could really feel this mother's mixed exasperation and love...very well done.
Loved this and the title was perfect. Sweet memories of when my children were small. Thank you for sharing.