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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Car Trip (07/18/05)
“Dad could you tell Sarah to stop it!” “Sarah, stop it” Dave said jadedly. He is fed up and does not understand why they have to travel across town to go to some convention. What’s wrong with the local church, life was so much easier before Kelly got over enthused about Jesus. Just to keep the peace and make her happy he decides to go along even if he does not see the point. “Mum, Sonia has hidden my teddy bear.” “Sarah started it, she has my puzzles.” “Oh for goodness sake girls will you behave yourselves.” Dave stifles the urge to scream at his girls, everything is getting on his nerves lately.

Kelly knew she has to keep her emotions in check and stay in faith for her family, even though there was enormous pressure on her to blurt her frustrations out of her mouth. She opts for silent prayer as well as heartfelt gratitude because Dave is going to the convention with her. The children were not usually grouchy she felt the pull on her focus. Yet she chose not to cave in. She is holding out for Dave’s salvation, she recalls the promises and regains reassurance. She recognises that Dave did not understand her relationship with God since they have both been going through the motions for so long. “Mum I need to use the toilet.” “Me too, and I am hungry could we stop off for a burger.” Her thoughts abruptly interrupted. She quietly explains they would pull over at the next junction.

Meanwhile Dave was not oblivious to the glaring change in how Kelly is handling the girls. Usually he was the most patient with them; Kelly on the other hand would have lost it! The girls were been unusually bratty and Kelly has been so calm, and he has been noticing the changes in her demeanour for a while. She seems so peaceful; some say that happens when you ‘receive Jesus’. Whatever! It may just be she has decided to be more patient. She even looks different, more radiant. His Kelly, once fixated with her makeup kit is not even as concerned about her makeup as she use to be, yet prettier than ever before. Dave could not deny his sadness as there is a part of Kelly’s life that he can’t truly relate to. It felt like she was having a legitimate affair with an invisible partner.

As they turned into the junction, the children were in glee as they saw the Welcome Break sign. Kelly shuffled them out of the car and asked Dave if he needed anything. Kelly raised her eyebrow, when she heard Dave’s reply “Since when did you loose your appetite darling, are you feeling okay?” She affectionately ruffled his hair and left with the girls who were already voicing their impatience.

Dave sighs letting out his emotional exhaustion, he leans back against the head rest. He heard a still small but powerful voice saying to him you can have the same tranquillity Kelly, all you have to do is ask. Torn between his ego and a desperate need for peace he resolutely chose the later.
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Nina Phillips
07/27/05
Amen. Short ride, with a sweet ending. Enjoyed reading. God bless ya, littlelight
Beth Muehlhausen
07/30/05
A changed life is the best testimony! Consistent verb tense would have helped this be a smoother read. I liked this line: "It felt like she was having a legitimate affair with an invisible partner." Well said!