The Official Writing Challenge
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The words and thoughts are poetic, but maybe in poem form it would flow better?
I agree, this is a prose poem. Also, have a peer edit what you write, you might be surprised with the results.
Bill, this was a delightful little poem with some powerful truths in it. It does need to be set out in a more formal poetry style (to make it easier for us to read and catch the right rhythm and flow), but the other major problem with it was the size. Unfortunately, Challenge entries have to be over 150 words and under 750 words to be eligible. "Todays Your Birthday" came in at just 102 words, so was too far under the limit. I hope you'll enter again though. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)