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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Calm (emotionally) (09/13/07)
Behold the eye of the Lord upon thee
Because we have hope of His mercy
Though in the midst of a terrible storm
His eye upon us keeps us from harm

In the hurricane’s Eye there is calm
‘Tis a refuge of stillness and balm
Whilst around is all turmoil and care
In the eye is quite gentle and fair

Though the world is speeding us by
I am resting assured in His eye
Tucked away from the hassles of life
Far from pangs mounting up in great strife

By still waters He bids me repose
Fields of green full of flowers He clothes
Brightest stars fill the sky in the night
Birds are silent then, no more to flight

Storms may be filled with commotion
In His eye is but sweetest emotion
So I coast there with no more delay
In His eye I am out of the fray
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Date
09/20/07
My mind is full of storm images ... which is what I imagine you were after with this poem. I also have picked up on the concept of God as a refuge or escape. The rhyming pattern is perfect, and the title is the top of a pyramid, directing the entire text back to it. Excellent.
Brandi Roberts
09/20/07
I had to read this twice it was so good! I like the rhythm, and the rhyme. Great word choices. Don't know why "eye" is capitalized in the second stanza, but other than that, it's wonderful.
c clemons
09/22/07
Stanza 1 and 2 are very good, a little reworking in the 3 as well as 4 but stanza 5 was good. Overall good job.
Sheri Gordon
09/24/07
I like how you used the eye of the storm to represent calm -- very good word picture.

The meter could use a little tightening -- but otherwise this is quite good.