The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice job. I knew this was about a runaway slave, but you spun it with a different ending. Good descriptions and direct dialog. Keep up the good work. God bless.
Like previously mentioned, I didn't expect the ending. Sometimes in order to make a nice story we might feel the need to leave the hard stuff out. You didn't. I appreciate that. Wonderful ending. Blessings, Reflectons
Very creative, awesome ending. Be careful of switiching from past to present tense. You did a great job with the suspense.
I definitely didn't expect the ending either - you pulled it off very well! I love the juxtaposition of the two different rivers! Your description was also very, very vivid.
I was picturing a family going west. I didn't clue into the runaway till the dogs started baying. I was glad to see you didn't leave her dying in the first river, but I enjoyed seeing her crossing the final river. Good work.
Very stirring and well-written story. I was caught up in the drama from beginning to end. Very good!
Fiction doesn't usually tug at my heartstrings, but this one did. Nice job. Kudos.
Really sad. It almost made me cry in the end. But at the same time it's happy (if that makes any sense). I thought it was a good idea, and, overall, a good peice. It could use some smoothing out, but I think all stories could use that. Also I was somewhat confused, especially during the beginning. But I thought it was a real sweet story.
A compelling story with a wonderful ending. Other than the shift in tenses this was very nicely written. Great job!
Congratulations on your "Highly Commended" win! God bless you as you continue to grow in your gifts and talents! Very, very well done ... wonderfully written!
Congrats! I love the ending of this piece. Keep writing.
What a gripping piece - no wonder it placed. Congrats.